Monday, November 14, 2011

the terrible masion

There was once were teenagers and the main one was carol. Carol always wore blue jeans with a white shirt. One day carol and his girl friend rented a machine for a night and they invited three people. There names were kassie and her boyfriend Austin also Seth a close friend of carol. Quickly they all packed up while carol went to pay the man and check out the mansion. While he was on the boat getting there he admired the warm sunny summer sky. The thing is that the owner just wanted to make a quick buck so he didn’t tell him that this mansion was haunted with real ghost. Just right after he paid him the cloud became so dark and so did the sky it became so dark and gloomy like and October sky. He went back for his friends and put all the stuff in the boat and set sail for the machine and Seth being a smart but and said you know this was a waste of gas when u went to the mansion paid him the went for us then went back to the mansion and carol slapped him hard at the back of the head and said be quiet and enjoyed the ride.
Next, finally they got there and unpacked so the went to the pool/hot tube and Seth wacked the beech ball so hard it hit Austin head so hard everyone started laughing. So Seth went in to the house to go get snacks. It passed a long time he never came out. Five minutes more passed he still never came out so they went to go get the snacks the hear shhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh they knocked on the bathroom door they thought he was going to the bathroom. They were waiting for him to get out but he never did all u could here was shhhhhhhhhhhhh like he was going to the bathroom. So carol and Seth about to barge in then …………..boom they kicked the door down and he was up side down over the toilet dead and the blood was dripping over the toilet that made it sound like he was going to the bathroom.
      Last, they made a run for it…… nope a little killer ghost girl with a knife stabbed Seth but he still on his feet. Then they here foot steps be hind him boom boom boom boom. One of the girls screams nope it was Seth and he had just died. They made another run for it but some ghost ladies chased them to the kitchen when so kitchen ghost popped up and got kassie. Carol and stephinny went up the stairs and jumped out of the three story window and stephinny landed on carols ribs and broke them. Carol told stephinny to grab the gas from the boat and light the house on fire and she did. When they got home they were all bloody they were about to get to the door when they hear a little girls laughing behind them with a knife.
done

2 comments:

zebrafish15 said...

Dear Zebrafish17,
The story was very INTORESTING you just spelling on tub was rong you just put an E on the end of tub

sinserly
Amber

Zebrafish3 said...

Dear Zebrafish017
Your story was very scary.Where did you get the names for the characters?You need to use periods,commas, and some more details.
From,
Zebrafish03